Monday, 2 June 2014

10:32 Glass Onion (pt.2)

A completely minor song like Glass Onion is a genuinely rare thing for the Beatles (Golden Slumbers, I Me Mine & Eleanor Rigby spring to mind). But from a songwriting point of view there's very little great stuff here that they haven't done much better elsewhere. Don't get me wrong. Glass Onion is a well recorded album track. And I like it personally. But if I was putting together a must listen to list of songwriting tips this wouldn't make the cut.

The main weaknesses are a melody that's doesn't resolve or go anywhere based round an A diminished chord (A C Eb) - the 'sing-song' 2 note melody was done a lot more effectively on I Am The Walrus. And the lyrics are poorly set and just give the impression that they were shoehorned in. Listen to “Lady Madonna trying to make ends meet”. And the cast iron shore line is squeezed by the needless 'yeah'.

Onions Have Layers

'Onion' is a horrible word to sing anyway but even more so when you put the stress is on the wrong syllable. Un-YON. Yuck. Making it the title and final word makes it stick out all the more. And having no rhyme to the hook (bunion, grunion, dungeon, luncheon?) and placing it on a bland chord that doesn't resolve (G maj, the bVII) means we get neither drama nor resolution.

It's ironic that 'Glass Onion' was Lennon's suggestion for renaming Apple recording artists The Iveys (they chose to be called Badfinger instead). A phrase that didn't work as a band name was also flawed as a song hook. Sometimes ideas have knots in them. You just have to work round them as best you can.

Deep breath.

As I said I like the song. That may be just my upbringing. But here are some good songwriting points and some better examples.

5 Good Things About Glass Onion

1) Ticket 22: Bluesify Your Melody
Done better on From Me To You

Lennon smothers the song in blues sauce by singing the 'out of key' Eb (b5).

NOthing is REAL
place you go EV'rything
LOOKing THROUGH ...see how the OTHER half
LOOKING through a glass Onion

What's more all the OOKC's* - C7 F7 Gm7 are created by altering 'in key' chords with blue notes - Bb in C7 and Gm7 and Eb in F7.

But it's all too jarring here. From Me To You is way smoother.

2) Ticket 32: The James Bond Chord Progression
Done better on Hey Bulldog

The rising chromatic chord melody starting from the 5th

Am - F/A - Am6 - Am7

in the B section is possibly the coolest part of the song. But bridge of Hey Bulldog is far superior, with the same idea appearing in TWO keys and the insistent “You can talk to me...” having a much stronger emotional pull than “Oh yeah...”

3) Ticket 40: A Very Small Vocal Range
Done better on Here Comes The Sun

Both songs have a span of a 5th but Harrison playfully inverts his melodic ideas keep them fresh where Lennon goes for jarring and repetitive. The fact that he doesn't use all 7 notes but doesn't create ambiguity, like Rain, just monotony.

4) Ticket 41: Use Same Ending In Two Sections
Done better on Let It Be

Recycling your ending in an AABA structure (Ticket 26) is a bold move but it doesn't give us the same sense of closure and comfort that Paul achieves in his 'hymn'

5) Ticket 2: Put Your Song On A Diet
Done better on Eleanor Rigby

2 snare hits for an intro and a sudden stop after the final verse. There is no fat on the hog. The 2:18 duration is more remarkable when you realise 29 seconds is taken up by George Martin's cello coda**. But there's no shortage of compact Beatles classics. (See what I did there?)

Hey this is my 400th post!!!!! (Read the very first right here)

*Out Of Key Chords (Ticket 28)

** This replaced Lennon's SFX coda (heard on Anthology 3). A wise choice as they'd done it better on the fade out of I Am The Walrus (not to mention Revolution 9).

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